studying the starlight—
in our search for habitable worlds
we don’t yet know the mass
or what they’re made of.
In our search for habitable worlds,
compelling clouds may be
what they’re made of;
or a small, dark circle on reddish ball.
Compelling clouds may be
practically in our backyard
with a small, dark circle on reddish ball
(the dimming sun).
Practically in our backyard,
fixed in the sky,
the dimming sun
shows a transiting planet.
Fixed on the sky,
we don’t yet know: this mass
shows a transiting planet
studying our starlight.
A pantoum of found phrases from this article on the discovery of “3 strange worlds” and this article about today’s transit of Mercury. Yeah Write’s weekly prompt is “We want to be left alone.”
I really like this. I like how meanings shift in the repeated phrases of a pantoum. I heard an astronomer on the radio this morning talking about the transit of Mercury.
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I watched a time-lapse video from NASA; but of course it seems it would be more exciting if I had the equipment to view it live for myself. 🙂
Btw, you are the one who got me fired up to try another pantoum!
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Oh–cool! (On both things!) 🙂
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Very well done. I particularly admire you being able to ‘find’ lines. I can’t, not ever.
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Thank you, Jane. Sometimes I get nothing–no erasure poems for me–but when someone else’s cool phrases jump out at me I just copy them into my notebook and see what happens. 🙂
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That sounds like a more fruitful way of doing it. I did get one once, using a text about gulls, but that was only because so many of the phrases were about things like feathers, flight, calls etc.
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Yes! You have to go with the ones that speak to you.
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Maybe I’ll fish it out. (no pun intended)
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Some really good phrases here: Studying our starlight, the dimming sun shows a transitioning planet… . All good stuff! ***
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Thank you. I’m sure I’ve said it before, but I find the most interesting and sometimes poetic lines in science articles!
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“Studying the starlight” “Compelling clouds” – I love those! Impressive that you can combine so many prompts and topics into one fabulous poem! I like that you anchor the massive universe to a small corner of the world. I had wanted to write something about the transit but so far, nothing.
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So then I went to the library and checked out CHASING VENUS, about the transits of Venus in 1761 and 1769. There may be more transit poems forthcoming! And I’m looking forward to yours. 🙂
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I watched the transit of Venus with my family a few years ago. Was fun and momentous!
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How did I miss that? Living under a rock, as usual…
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Not at all! I think I caught it my accident 🙂
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