safely held under
fishing for dark life to hold
in freezing cold find
thoughts miles below the surface
swaying to unknown currents
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safely held under
fishing for dark life to hold
in freezing cold find
thoughts miles below the surface
swaying to unknown currents
Graceful Press Poetry 
That first line is such a paradox – “safely held under.” Nope. Makes me feel claustrophobic and short of breath.
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I’m not even sure where that line came from, especially the “safely” part–it’s just like that in my notebook, though I purposely broke after “under” and not just for syllable count. (sorry. breathe deep.)
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“swaying to unknown currents” – such a great phrase! *
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Thank you. I was having verb-trouble this morning! It took me a bit to land on that one.
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I love “swaying to unknown currents” too. Metaphor for many lives. 🙂
Have you been reading about the latest findings in the deepest sea trenches?
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Ha, yes, you got me! I was going to reference the NPR article that caught my eye the other day, but then I was afraid it would be distracting. ‘Cause I started to feel the poem wasn’t really about deep sea creatures, per se. 🙂
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Well, it wasn’t, but still. I probably read the same article. 🙂
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I was thinking of you–something like, “Merril will know just where this inspiration came from.” !
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Awww! That’s sweet. (Or weird.) Haha.
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Yes! I identify so deeply with the water-emotions link and you build it so well here from line to line.
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Deep water and caves–they are always popping up in my stuff…
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I love how you have got movement and submersion working in concert. Brings up all the memories of watching things float along the bottom of a small lake we used to visit …
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Something on the bottom moving to a very different rhythm from what’s on the surface. I was trying to write another poem with this idea in it, only a river, but it turned out a bit not-right.
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Productive playing!
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Beautiful composition!!
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Thank you very much for taking the time to say so!
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