Earth Day—and I may well dream
of the view from the stars
or the birds, what we look like, doing
down here; and surely
the birds care no more nor less
than the neighbor, scrape-raking her deck
why I sit here, empty
in the sun, in the thunder
convulsing waves of fear, hate
like fish schooling
whooshing this way and that
slosh and drown—but
let’s bring it back down
to a point, to all pieces fitted
together in this landscape
why I sit here, empty
or like a barefoot god
granting water or death
dividing root from root—
a momentary purpose
in these quiet hours, enough
to breathe this air, and care ?
why I sit here, empty
NaPoWriMo prompt for Day 22 is Earth Day. Title from Mary Oliver’s “Wild Geese” (sneaking in on yesterday’s Poetic Asides prompt), which also includes these lines that got me thinking: “over and over announcing your place/in the family of things.” Form is a bop, explained nicely here.
Lots of food for thought here. But everything always contains its opposite. (K)
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This is one of those where even I go back and wonder just what I was trying to say. 🙂 But it felt good going out of the pen.
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Interesting form and well suited for the topic.
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Thank you. It’s the first bop I’ve tried…my resistance to new forms usually comes from either laziness or a fear of failure. Or both.
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I’ve never tried a bop. The chorus works very well to underline and anchor your stanzas. I love love love the line “or like a barefoot god / granting water or death”
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Oh, thank you. I was hoping that line would work.
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Good Earth Day poem. The refrain works really well–a sense of almost why bother?
I really like this form. I want to give it a try, too. 🙂
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Yes, try it! (Maybe after April. 🙂 )
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I really, really like this — All the exterior disjunction in the first stanza and then all the interior disjunction in the rest, and how it continues after the poem is done. Lovely.
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Thank you. I’m so glad to get your reaction. I’d like to work through these now that April is over and figure out which are worth refining for a future collection. 🙂
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A it if good stuff to work with this year! And you made it to the end!! Yay!
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I really enjoyed this bop! I would have totally voted for it if it had gone on the grids last week. Nevertheless, I think it was well done. I might have rocked a bit back and forth from the sway of the words.
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Aw, thanks, Melony. My timing was all off to submit this one to the grids…but I hope to be back now NaPoWriMo is done!
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