Sea whispers to me in my drowning dreams,
and you who balance life and death must know
the debt to pay for treasure stolen thus
from those whose hurts and needs you’d sworn to heal—
blood gold with which you build on burning sand
fool’s fort to keep my heart and gift well-hid.
And if I wished to be their sacrifice?
My people’s fear now spills in hissing waves;
they know the sea god means to take his price.
Just hear! His call to me is calm and deep:
a silent slip into a lover’s arms,
brief storm, then stillness, peace—my part fulfilled.
Thanks to Jane Dougherty for sharing her two-sentence story inspired by this painting, and for inviting me to add this imagining of what happened next.
I do like this poem! You get right under the skin of the ancients, what it must have meant to go against tradition and the will of the gods. Great writing!
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Thank you. I had some great inspiration! 🙂
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I love Redon’s paintings, especially the boats. He must have had a thing about them that i can relate to.
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Reblogged this on Jane Dougherty Writes and commented:
If you wanted to know what happens in the next chapter of yesterday’s two sentence story, Jennifer Knoblock has written it in a splendid poem.
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Love the poem, the painting and the two sentence story. Great way to begin the day! Thanks.
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Oh, glad you liked it!
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You had me at the title, but your perfect rhythm, rhyme and imagery are just sublime! And I love the painting and 2 sentence story as well…what a great idea.
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Thanks. Jane’s story really grabbed me–the sea, the mother/daughter thing, raiders–all good stuff.
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Gorgeous. It all winds up to its beautiful end. Very nice.
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Do you ever find that you know the end first, then feel you have to work up to it? I think this is a case of that. 😉
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Usually it is the opposite for me. I have a start and the end is a total surprise. But that is because I don’t really know what the heck I am doing …
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Wow, this was fabulous! I love “Blood gold”–that will stick with me awhile.
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Thanks! One of those images that just popped in, and I let it stay. 🙂
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I LOVE when that happens!
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