I had a prentice, once. She came across the river, bright belief like starshine, sharp. I taught her names; to listen, still; how words quick-hum inside the oak, how they can build and howl like lightning splits the sky, and spill. We strung them fine on heart-string rope to make a blackbird song. She’s gone. To have her back! but autumn spells and heartsease hold her now.
A little blank verse for the Yeah Write May poetry slam.
Love, love the rhythm of this —
‘I taught her names; to listen, still; how words
quick-hum inside the oak, how they can build
and howl like lightning splits the sky, and spill.’
The ‘and spill’ in that spot is perfection! Well done!
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Thank you. A good kind of stretch for me to write to a strict meter. I find myself using lots of little words, haha.
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I loved those three lines in particular as well. So vivid and picturesque. The “quick-hum” word is perfect right there. Very nice!
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Love the look of your blog
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Thanks for stopping by!
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Love the idea of “bright belief like star shine”. We should all have that about something in our lives. So much wonderful hope. ♥
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Kathy, you always see the positive things! Thanks.
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Damn. This is so clever that it sneaks up on you. The made-up words, the compound words and portmanteau (I count “heartsease” — I know it is a word but still…), the poem about words. The magic of it all. The “quick-hum.” Brilliant, my poet-friend.
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the poem about words…and I thought I was being subtle. 😉
Thank you for your generous and insightful encouragement.
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