Your life lived long
at train-speed:
rushing slowing
stop
gaining momentum again
trying to fix one spot
in view, then
watch it blur
to green-light, blue-cloud
(painterly hues)
too fast
to make any moment stay
too slow
to (superhumanly)
reverse the day
Graceful Press Poetry 
Love this.
“trying to fix one spot
in view, then
watch it blur…”
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I was hoping it made sense. 🙂
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I love that part too! Also the stay-day rhyme. Lovely expression of your thought/idea.
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Thank you. Trying to decide if I want to submit it to the microstories grid. Or maybe I’ll think of something really brilliant by tomorrow…
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Well I rather think this is fits the bill 🙂
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Ha. 🙂
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I totally agree with sentiments shared by everone else
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Thanks for reading, Ruby!
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Very nice. Like Silverleaf, I think this is *really* brilliant.
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Thanks, Susan.
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Pretty much life lived in a nutshell. Well done and expressed eloquently.
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It started out about me, then it was about my husband’s grandmother…so I guess it is just “life.” Thanks for your comment.
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Do I sense a touch of Superman?
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Absolutely! 🙂
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The power to reverse the day. I can see the good and bad sides. Very nicely written.
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Good point–if you could reverse it, would you, should you? Thanks for reading!
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Love the rhythm in this and how it fits both trains and life
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Thanks, Marcy. I’m glad that part worked for you!
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Such a lovely take on life. Drawing a comparison to a train. And then linking it up with the prompt. This is art 🙂
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What a sweet thing to say! Thanks very much.
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Love where you secreted internal rhyme, Jen. That drottkvaett fine-tuned my skills so it just blossomed while I read this.
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After the drottkvaetts, I found myself actually wanting rhyme. Crazy!
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“it” equals your rhyming, in my last comment
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So many wonderful juxtapositions! Nicely done, my friend.
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Thanks, Meg. Wonderful to hear from you!
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Beautifully written
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