Our theory of reason shot
from the sky, assaulted
on the street, flattened,
drowned, mud-slimed
We demand pattern
in the random,
news-desk explanations
of humanity’s implosion
as if
this could keep us safe
We barricade minds
and hearts, lulled
by deafening
static
Nicely pulled together. Humans have so many fault lines, don’t we?
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So many fault lines–nicely put. I’m reminded of it every time I read the news. 😦
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“Shot out of the sky”… Yea I guess the news aren’t too good lately are they? I read and comment on this amazing post with a calm, cold look on my face, one that usually accompanies my cynical side. Congrats on implementing the post. That last line/word is all too powerful. Where did the signal go…?
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Yes, “cynical” is definitely a word that goes with this. Thanks for the support!
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really love the movement of this. and then the last word “static” all alone. BOOM. well done.
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Thanks for the “boom.” I was hoping it would have a little punch.
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Too good, my favorite so far. ***
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What a super thing to say! That means a lot to me. 🙂
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Very visceral. I felt the punch!
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Thanks for that. I like to be positive, but sometimes…
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This was so good Jennifer!
I absolutely loved the last line…static!
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Thanks, Michelle. This one was hard to write, though the “frequency” references were the fun part.
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It is so true, isn’t it? I love how you pulled this together. Very well done! (:
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Thanks so much, I’m glad you stopped by!
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I thought some of your word choices here were just perfect, really evocative – “mud-slimed,” “news-desk explanations,” “static.” It made for a powerful read.
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Oh, thanks, what a great thing to say! I really appreciate that you saw some craftsmanship. 🙂
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As ever, this is deeply haunting, Jennifer. The sense of futility lingers on after reading. That first line is especially powerful, ending in “shot,” but the thought continuing to the next line. Well done.
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Futility–yes. I’m glad you liked that line break. I was hoping it didn’t come off as being too obvious. (The things I worry about, haha.)
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This left me with the question “What are you going to do about it?” lingering over me. Your choice of leaving single word lines was powerful. And your concise point cuts through all the white noise out there.
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Thanks for the comment, Nate. All the noise, noise, noise noise noise! indeed.
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A scary scene — it conveys the sentiment of a post-apocalyptic world without telling the details. Interesting.
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Ooh, I like your reading of this! Thanks for stopping by!
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