In the wake of Odysseus
tide-washed smooth skin
soft sleek hair unbound
a singer and you’ve known
the words. The horizon
is empty all rocks submerged
nothing for it but to sail
into her arms and never
question (a gift horse, regret).
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Nice to know this beautiful siren song is the number one… I’m looking forward to reading the following ones 🙂 Have a nice Sunday!
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Ah, thank you. I hope I can make some more that you find beautiful! Wishing you a nice Sunday, too!
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Lovely–“Siren Song” is so immediately captivating as a title.
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Thank you. It’s sometimes challenging, sometimes fun (sometimes both) to work with the baggage that comes with certain words or phrases.
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Oh my, Jennifer. A lovely rendering, with a thoughtful and beautiful flow.
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Thank you, Jo-Anne.
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Love the allure to a life at sea that your mermaid tale creates. Very poetic and love the word “siren” – a lady always to be wary of 😉
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The sea is very alluring, isn’t it? Is my Pisces showing? 😉
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This telling makes it sound so peaceful to submit. 🙂
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Oh, nice read! Easier to submit than to fight…Now I have the Crowded House song “Into Temptation” playing in my head.
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Soothing, sad and clever all at once. Loved it!
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Thanks for your very kind comments.
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There is danger here. I sense it. I know it. The lure of the siren is strong though so I am sure that my warnings will go unheeded. Turn the boat around.
Very nicely written – love the reference to Odysseus.
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Ha, yes…turn the boat around, and watch out for those submerged rocks…thanks for liking Odysseus. He was lurking in my mind, can’t remember why.
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Lovely imagery.
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Thank you!
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“you’ve known the words” ..I simply adored that line.
Swoon (ing) to the music.
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Yay, thanks. That’s one I tinkered with a little more than the others…
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Love your imagery that captures the essence of the mermaid beautifully.
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Thank you, Kathy!
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Great allusions here!
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I’m glad someone likes the allusions. 🙂 I couldn’t resist.
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Oh my! Such sensuality, such vivid imagery–beautifully done!
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Thank you!
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I agree with F.G.M. and I’m also looking forward to more. 🙂 My favorite line was: “tide-washed smooth skin”.
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Thank you! I was thinking of how the tide smooths out the sand. I’m glad you liked the line!
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I especially like the line “a singer and you’ve known the words.” It got me thinking about how we do know all about the things that most tempt us, yet we still can’t always resist them.
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Oh, too true. Thank you for this, Honestly, I wasn’t sure about that line…
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I like every word of this! how you’ve managed to run waters over the smooth skin, how you’re letting loose the sleek hair, everything! Wonderful 🙂
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Thank you! The way you put it makes everything sound better!
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This flows beautifully and I love, love, love the first line!!
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Oh, and even the way you’ve chosen to make your line breaks adds to the way this poetry just truly flows 🙂
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Thank you so much for noticing these details, and for your very kind words.
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This is so, so good! Precise, evocative and every detail counts. Nice job!
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Thanks so much. I take this very kindly coming from such a talented writer. 🙂
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Wow. Thanks, Jennifer. You’re good for my ego :-)!
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Beautiful poem, Jennifer! Ending is superb, and I love the gift horse : )
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Yay! Someone likes the gift horse! 🙂 Thanks, Kymm.
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You have such a great ear for words, Jennifer. This is subtly lilting, just like a tide coming in. I especially admire this:
a singer and you’ve known
the words.
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Thanks, Meg. Now my little poet’s heart is also lilting.
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Love this one.
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Thank you!
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This is lovely, and of course any reference to Odysseus takes me back to senior seminar…
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Haha. He just pushed his way in there when the mermaid came up…
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