A long look
down short
track or short
glance down
long track
looking longingly
for one train
out of town
curving sharp
around farmland
having tunneled
through hard hills…
The empty car
is better seat-
silence sun
slanting against
glass so you see
not only waving
grain in fields
(broad flat-
horizoned view)
but your own
reflection heavy-
eyed age-lined…
No. You want
the fast train
to the city
at night lights
dim beyond
drinks car
view starry
blackness
open like
a dream
revealed
in the rhythmic
bump of tracks
someone’s sleep-
deep breathing
and slowly
solidifying
twinkle
that sings
your future
Graceful Press Poetry 
Jennifer I enjoyed this very much, short lines makes it so rhrythmic! I’m writing a poem with short lines, it’ a coincidence.I absolutely adore the last five lines. Merci pour ta puissante et inspirée poésie!
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Thank you so much for your words. I was experimenting…I’m glad you liked the short lines!
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Wonderful images and very nice rhythm!
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Thanks! I saw a photo of empty train tracks and started thinking of all the trains I’d been on…wasn’t really sure if the structure would work.
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WOW, it really felt like I was riding along, as I read. Wonderfully well done. “Twinkle that sings your future” is definitely a keeper–love that phrase!
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Oh, I’m glad you liked it…I just thought I’d try to make it look more like train tracks, but then with the shorter lines I decided to toss out punctuation, too! 🙂
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Oh silly me–I didn’t get the visual, was too busy looking out the window, I guess!!
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Haha, it’s not you, the visual part didn’t really work the way I wanted. This one may be up for further work on another day.
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This is why I don’t gravitate toward poetry that’s written in “shapes”–I’m too involved inside the words, to notice. Maybe it’s a left-, right-side brain thing, I don’t know.
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